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A Second Chance - Chapter 1 by Nimaru

The story sets up an interesting scenario to be sure, and while I'm not a fan of pictures in stories, they supported the story rather than take away from it. You did a good job setting the atmosphere as well. Maybe that's from making comics. It sounded beautiful as you set up every part of the environment, from the mountains to the weeds. I'd say you could improve in providing background for new readers. While we, your fans, know the background, it might not hurt to provide a prologue of sorts for new readers. I'm very curious to see where this goes, and I'm going to have to implore you to put this story on FiMFiction. It's a quality story, and I would love to see it on there.
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Nimaru Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thank you for your thoughts! I struggled with how much backstory to put in and every input on that helps.

I'm not afraid to put it on Fimfiction, but shouldn't I wait until it's done for that?
Clonetrooperkev Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013
Hell no, you can put it up with 1000 words. You're good to go :D
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